A peaceful, friendly looking castle
But the promenade is embitterd
There behind those great brick walls
Hides her fragile soul
At the beautiful estate before the castle
Is the battlefield, where many brave soldiers died
Their souls have been killed
Killed by the strength of the inaccessible fort
No one can come inside that beautiful place
The entrance is hidden, overgrown by dissapointment
Her soul has no strengt to remove the barricades
She has to wait for someone brave with an enless patience
To come and set her free
..
Voor mijn gevoel is hij nog niet helemaal af. Iemand tips/ideeen/opbouwende kritiek?
..